in all honesty...
it was k...you have potential ill give you that, you know how to animate and you can draw fairly well, just put some more thought into the animation part hm? the story is half the work and thats half of what gets you the points, go watch "the pen is mightier than the sword" on the front page, see how somthing so simple can be done with such grace and the fact is, its basic but beautiful eh, watch some vids and look for inspiration! good luck :D